I'm belated on this, but a few of Lizzie's comments that I think are important haven't been taken into account, such as:
– Calling Phillipa's charater "Hamilton's wife" is just wrong; not only does her character have a name, the Tony committee categorized it as a leading role. She is the focus of the show by the end, after all. Why not:
> Besides Miranda, other stars in the show are going to leave[^,] including Tony nominee Phillipa Soo, who plays [^Eliza], Hamilton’s wife.
– HamiltonTheMusicalLondon is not the name of the site. It's already linked; just call it "the official UK site" or something.
– A large majority of non-Broadway theatregoers doesn't need a comma after it.
– I agreed with Lizzie's statement on em-dashes vs. hyphens, so I hope they were changed, since they look okay now. If not, and Lizzie was commenting on their current state, they look like hyphens but that's just the font.
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Some of my own (apologies if any have been mentioned; I didn't read every post thoroughly):
– "out of the PrivateBank Theatre" -> "at the PrivateBank Theatre"
– Unless you think fans care if he's backstage doing lights or something, "It is unclear if Lin-Manuel Miranda will be involved with the Chicago show in any way" -> "[ . . . ] will perform in the Chicago show at any time". Gets rid of awkward phrasing because the sentence as it stands goes on and ends in "anyway", so you have "any way" followed by "anyway".
– "sightlines" is also one word
– "although the face-value tickets are expected to be the same price as they are in New York" – this isn't true. Matched band-for-band, Chicago is less expensive.
– "Tuesday June 21" -> "Tuesday morning"; you already said the date twice, and it would need a comma anyway
– "ramping-up" -> "ramping up"
– "shipping Hamilton to London[^,] and the show is set"
– "will be managed by Cameron Mackintosh[^,] and will take up residency at [-> residence in] London’s Victoria Palace Theatre, which was vacated by Billy Elliot (which ran from 2005 to 2016)[^.]"
– "going to leave[^,] including"
– "starting cast of the show have all" -> "the original cast of the show has"
– "of what the Hamilton phenomenon has given them" -> "of the Hamilton phenomenon"
– "This, in turn, has made them household names nit [-> not] just in the Broadway industry, but far beyond." (besides which, this cannot be true; not even Lin is a household name)
– "any new up-and-coming Broadway stars" -> "any up-and-coming Broadway stars" (redundancy)
– "Secondary market ticket prices" -> "secondary market ticket prices"
– "the date after Miranda leaves" -> "the date after which Miranda leaves"
– "re-sellers" -> "resellers"
– "theatre. Meaning that" -> "theatre, meaning that"
– "next show" -> "subsequent show"
– "eat their losses, but given the huge profits that they have garnered so far, it may be the cost of doing business." -> "eat their losses. But given the huge profits that they have garnered so far, they may see it as the cost of doing business."
– "Now the warmer weather is here and Miranda is officially leaving on July 9, 2016 – the wait" -> "Now that the warmer weather is here and Miranda is officially leaving on July 9, 2016[^,]the wait"
– "management at the Richard Rodgers Theatre are now" -> "management at the Richard Rodgers Theatre is now" (Christina, you weren't born or educated in the UK, were you? No insult; it's just that your noun/verb agreement is in line with British style guides.)
– "on the cancellation ticket line" -> "in the cancellation ticket line"
– "line, but the new policies" (there are two spaces after the comma)
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And this article is longer than I thought it would be, it's late, and I'm not getting paid for this. I'm tapping out.
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