Review my play?
Review my play?
JudasIscariot
Broadway Legend Joined: 2/20/05
#1Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 1:06amHey guys. At the moment, I am working on a musical that I would like to put on as a workshop at school at some point. I would like some feedback as to how it is going, and if you like it or not. I am not sure whether I want to ditch the songs and make it a play, so I would also like some opinions on that. It's only about 12 pages so far. Updated On: 6/10/08 at 01:06 AM
#2re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 1:26amf you could put it in another format, like google doc, i'd be happy to review it
Fear no more the heat o' the sun,
Nor the furious winter's rages;
Thou thy worldly task hast done,
Home art gone and ta'en thy wages:
Golden lads and girls all must,
As chimney-sweepers, come to dust.
~Cymbeline
JudasIscariot
Broadway Legend Joined: 2/20/05
#2re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:00am
Here you go, this is the posted text.
Updated On: 6/10/08 at 11:00 AM
vmlinnie
Broadway Legend Joined: 6/19/06
#3re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:11amI'd love to also.
The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
vmlinnie
Broadway Legend Joined: 6/19/06
#4re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:13amDo you have any audio files?
The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
JudasIscariot
Broadway Legend Joined: 2/20/05
#5re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:16am
Not at the moment. I haven't gotten a chance to record any of the music yet, just write it.
vmlinnie
Broadway Legend Joined: 6/19/06
#6re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:19am
Maybe try get something like Finale and create MIDI files of your songs.
I'll PM you with my responses - this time with more than a blank message!
The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.
Derek Mahon
"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."
Arthur Miller
Broadway Legend Joined: 12/31/69
#7re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:21amYou know, the quality of your show doesn't matter! Get Cubby Bernstein behind you and you'll win a Tony!
SueleenGay
Broadway Legend Joined: 6/9/03
#8re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:22am
Don't bother.
The fact that the character description of one of the characters is "is gay", rape jokes? I couldn't even finish it. I found it offensive and juvenile.
PEACE.
JudasIscariot
Broadway Legend Joined: 2/20/05
#9re: Review my play?
Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:23amSee, Cubby wouldn't like me because I don't like Xanadu.
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