Review my play?

[JudasIscariot]

Review my play?#1

Posted: 6/10/08 at 1:06am

Hey guys. At the moment, I am working on a musical that I would like to put on as a workshop at school at some point. I would like some feedback as to how it is going, and if you like it or not. I am not sure whether I want to ditch the songs and make it a play, so I would also like some opinions on that. It's only about 12 pages so far. Updated On: 6/10/08 at 01:06 AM

[EmieMarie]

re: Review my play?#2

Posted: 6/10/08 at 1:26am

f you could put it in another format, like google doc, i'd be happy to review it

Fear no more the heat o' the sun, Nor the furious winter's rages; Thou thy worldly task hast done, Home art gone and ta'en thy wages: Golden lads and girls all must, As chimney-sweepers, come to dust. ~Cymbeline

[JudasIscariot]

re: Review my play?#2

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:00am

Here you go, this is the posted text.
Updated On: 6/10/08 at 11:00 AM

[vmlinnie]

re: Review my play?#3

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:11am

I'd love to also.

The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.

Derek Mahon

"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."

Arthur Miller

[vmlinnie]

re: Review my play?#4

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:13am

Do you have any audio files?

The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.

Derek Mahon

"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."

Arthur Miller

[JudasIscariot]

re: Review my play?#5

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:16am

Not at the moment. I haven't gotten a chance to record any of the music yet, just write it.

[vmlinnie]

re: Review my play?#6

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:19am

Maybe try get something like Finale and create MIDI files of your songs.

I'll PM you with my responses - this time with more than a blank message!

The rain we knew is a thing of the past -
deep-delving, dark, deliberate you would say
browsing on spire and bogland; but today
our sky-blue slates are steaming in the sun,
our yachts tinkling and dancing in the bay
like racehorses. We contemplate at last
shining windows, a future forbidden to no one.

Derek Mahon

"Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets."

Arthur Miller

[Unknown User]

re: Review my play?#7

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:21am

You know, the quality of your show doesn't matter! Get Cubby Bernstein behind you and you'll win a Tony!

[SueleenGay]

re: Review my play?#8

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:22am

Don't bother.
The fact that the character description of one of the characters is "is gay", rape jokes? I couldn't even finish it. I found it offensive and juvenile.

PEACE.

[JudasIscariot]

re: Review my play?#9

Posted: 6/10/08 at 11:23am

See, Cubby wouldn't like me because I don't like Xanadu.