^^^ Perhaps the original point was that Hammerstein usually eschews the clever rhymes of a Hart or Porter or even Sondheim. In fact, Hammerstein had the confidence to write simply and trust his audience rather than feeling he had to dazzle them with wordplay in every line.
But to me, "moon, June, spoon" means lazy and cliche. Hammerstein uses simple rhymes and identities to convey deep emotion, just as great composers repeat musical themes.
In another thread, several posters mentioned the following as one of their favorite show songs:
EMILE:
One dream in my heart,
One love to be living for,
One love to be living for
This nearly was mine.
One girl for my dream,
One partner in paradise,
This promise of paradise
This nearly was mine.
Close to my heart she came
Only to fly away,
Only to fly as day
Flies from moonlight
Now, now I'm alone,
Still dreaming of paradise,
Still saying that paradise
Once nearly was mine.
Not a true rhyme in the entire lyric, except for the internal "away"/"day" in the bridge. (He does this I think to help the ear during what is a four-line sentence.)
That isn't "moon/June/spoon". This is a dramatist writing for a character who is in the depths of despair and speaking in a language not native to him. And if your Emile can half carry a tune, it's a devastating song on stage.
I am resolved to try to emulate Hammerstein's simple honesty in the next show I write (depending on the subject and characters, of course). Frankly, it's a lot easier to be glib.
Updated On: 7/12/14 at 11:02 PM