Is That You in Your Avatar? Part 4- Page 37

[D2]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:05pm

Or Deet.

[vmlinnie]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:06pm

Btw, last page, you said that your other bitch was here. Is that Taz, or me? Or someone else?

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:06pm

Linnie: You can't copy someone else. It's fine to mimic someone else, for the first or second book. It's only through writing, and trial and error that you find your own, unique voice.

I found the TITANIC script. It's not even in standard format... it looks more like a play. And this:

19 INT. LAB DECK / KELDYSH - NIGHT

Beull hands Lovett the phone, pushing down the blinking line. The call is from Rose and we see both ends of the conversation. She is in her kitchen with a mystified Lizzy.

That's not even close to correct format. It should look something like this:

INT. LAB DECK - KELDYSH - NIGHT

Beull hands Lovett the phone, pushing down the blinking line.

LOVETT
This is Brock Lovett. What can I do for you, Mrs... ?

BUELL
Rose Calvert.

LOVETT
... Mrs. Calvert?

INT. CALVERT RESIDENCE - KITCHEN - DAY

Rose speaks into the phone.

ROSE
I was just wondering if you had found the "Heart of the Ocean" yet, Mr. Lovett.

It looks like the script that's online is a very cheap knockoff. Like someone watched the movie and wrote the script afterwards, with no training or experience in writing scripts.

Sorry to turn this into a lecture. If this script is the real script, you'd think Cameron, or someone, would know how to format one correctly.

Updated On: 4/21/07 at 02:06 PM

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:08pm

Linnie, taz is my "other" bitch. I'm no one's bitch.

Well, except for Sally, Debra, Julie White, and pattifan2. But that's it.

Updated On: 4/21/07 at 02:08 PM

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:09pm

And Alexis Davis (General Hospital).

But that's it. Absolutely.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:09pm

TITANIC has an awesome score! In 8th grade, our theatre teacher played one of the songs, and I was the only who knew the song's title.

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:10pm

Oh, and Bernadette Peters. I'm totally Bernadette's bitch.

And that's it.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:10pm

What about Debra?

Or is she your bitch?

[vmlinnie]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:13pm

Well, ABS, mine is the offical one. And I've looked that scene up, it says:

19 INT. LAB DECK / KELDYSH - NIGHT

Beull hands Lovett the phone, pushing down the blinking line. The call is from Rose and we see both ends of the conversation. She is in her kitchen with a mystified Lizzy.

BROCK
This is Brock Lovett. WHat can I do for you Mrs... ?

BUELL
Rose Calvert

BROCK
... Mrs. Calvert?



It's real, alright. And, accoridng to you, not very good.


And, when I said I was trying to do a Stephen King, I didn't mean I was trying to write a Stephen King novel. I meant that I was thinking of starting the story without knowing how it finishes, which is something he often does. I certainly wasn;t copying him, his stories, or his style. Just that.

[D2]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:13pm

Abs, she mentioned Debra. But not JOYously.

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:14pm

Oh yeah - and Joy Franz. If she asked, I'd surely be her bitch as well.

And this thermos.

[vmlinnie]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:15pm

Oh, I get it, Rath. I'm unwanted. That's just - just... fine by me. I'm not upset. Not at all. Not one bit! I tell you...

[D2]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:17pm

Linnie, you are wanted, just not the way you want to be wanted, that's all. You are like the son we're never going to have but would be so thrilled to claim as our own.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:17pm

Oh, I didn't know a "Stephen King" was that. That's what I've done with the screenplay, and probably why it's taken me a year to write it.

The problem with the example is that the slugline says we're "INT. LAB DECK / KELDYSH - NIGHT", which translates to "Inside the lab deck of the Keldysh, at night." Technically, it should be EXT, 'cause we're outside, just on the ship.

But then the next sentences, "The call is from Rose and we see both ends of the conversation. She is in her kitchen with a mystified Lizzy."

A screenplay can't contain stuff we can't SEE. So, the firs part, "The call is from Rose" needs to be cut. Now the last sentence, "She is in her kitchen..."

When did the slugline mention a kitchen? I thought we were on the lab deck of the Keldysh.

If I submitted that script to a producer, he and all his producer friends would laugh. Then ask me if I was serious. This is one of the worst scripts I've ever read, actually.

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:17pm

Sorry, hon, I don't think I can handle more than two.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:19pm

Linnie, you can be my bitch!

[vmlinnie]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:20pm

Apparently I'm now D2's adopted cyber-space son, and I was Taz's adopted cyber-space brother, so I'm ok now, thanks Rath.

And yes, ABS, it's messy. But is has James Cameron's name on the cover, so it'll get away with it.

Edit: ABS, I would be only honoured to be your bitch.

Updated On: 4/21/07 at 02:20 PM

[MatthewAddison]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:23pm

Another blah day.

I hope this isn't a pattern emerging.

[D2]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:24pm

It's all sort of like the Hollywood equivalent of DEUCE. Messy script, apparently, but has Terrence McNally's name on the cover so it gets attention.

The hell with getting a gimmick, you gotta get a NAME!

[vmlinnie]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:25pm

Every time I look at the clock, it's 26 past something, an hour after I last looked, and I vaguely feel my day slipping away from me, so I'm going to go now and do a bit of music work.

Anyone else realize that we've filled almost 1/5th of a thread in, what, three days? Keep it up, I say.

Bye for now.

ETA: WHile I'm out, I'll change my name to Arthur Miller. That'll get me places.

Updated On: 4/21/07 at 02:25 PM

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:26pm

Bye, bye! I'm glad to have my own bitch!

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:28pm

When I was a kid, I planned on having my stage name be (Rath) Minnelli. I thought that might get me some auditions.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:32pm

What? Like you were the long lost bastard stepchild of Liza?

[Rathnait62]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:33pm

That's the idea.

[ABSteel]

Posted: 4/21/07 at 2:38pm

It might've worked.