Chloe, you are right.. I will wind up fixating on this and never move on.. (so for now I'm worrying about the minor details like the screw ups in my typing and punctuation, as well as a few times I slipped into past tense instead of present.) Did I mention it took me a week to do those first 9 pages, with 4 days of rewrites. Gah!
I have written about 2 pages of the second chapter though.. I hated it, and was ready to scrap both pages, but I think 4 lines of dialogue fixed what I was hating about it.. I'm still not sure if I like it or not.. We will have to wait and see where it goes.. I'm still seriously considering changing it to third person instead of first person. That would make my life so much easier I think.. not to mention it wouldn't limit me on what I can do with it..
"All work and no smut makes Cammy lose her edge." ~DG
"Someday I'm going to have a baby and I'm gonna name her L'il Mimi Marquez and I and will sing to her every day and when she's a toddler I will say "L'il Mimi Marquez, clad only in a bubble diaper, will perform her famous play pen handcuff dance to the sounds of breast milk being pumped!" ~Kringas