Posted: 11/17/21 at 11:15pm
Bsmusicd said: "The show I would compare it to is, "War Paint." Lovely score, excellent performances, beautiful design. In both shows the authors were not fully successful at finding conflict and drama between their (real-life) subjects. I'd take a lovingly-crafted show with some book issues over the lastest jukebox musical any day of the week, however."
I disagree. War Paint at least had songs. Like actual musical theater songs. It's really hard for me to describe the music in this. It feels almost random? Like it was written 5 minutes ago. The songs seem to just kinda happen and they just kinda flop around on the stage until they end. They add practically nothing to the show or the characters. They almost seem to exist simply because they've billed this as a musical and must fulfill that obligation to the audience. The title song is a *great* song. It's beautiful and Carmen's voice is DIVINE.
The first act really didn't work for me. The show doesn't really have an opening number (although, like I said, the echoing shoes are really interesting) and the dialogue is unfortunately just as unremarkable as the score. It's surprisingly unfunny and I really feel like the order in which this show plays out is all wrong. I think the show gives us too much information up front, which really hurts the second act. There aren't really any revelations because we're told pretty much everything about these people right from the start.
I was extremely disappointed in the show by intermission as I really felt like the show was, if this makes sense, barely even written. The show does wake up briefly in the second act as the four characters meet poolside to take a trip together. It became abundantly clear to me that this is where the show should really start. All the information given in the first act should really be given in the second. Even better, this is begging to be a brisk 90 minute one act musical where the four of them trip together and divulge their deepest secrets to each other.
Basically I would cut the whole first act and distribute some of that material into the second.

